Feedback on your pitches, queries and blurbs

Ready to get your novel out into the world? These services will help you pitch your manuscript with confidence, whether you’re looking to grab the attention of agents, publishers or your target readers.

Query letter critique

A query letter critique is for you if:

you’re preparing to pitch your manuscript to agents;
you’ve already sent out some queries but aren’t getting any requests;
you’ve written a query letter as a planning or revision tool and want some feedback to guide your next steps.

What can I offer you?

Query letters are notoriously difficult to get right, and the task can feel even harder when you’re so close to your story. I’ll be a fresh pair of eyes to give you an idea of the impression your query will make on an agent.

I will give you feedback on:

how compelling your premise and pitch are;
the impression given by your chosen comp titles;
whether the query shows that you understand genre expectations;
whether the query shows that your manuscript has all the core storytelling elements in place;
anything that is missing, unclear or might be a ‘red flag’ for an agent.

Why should you hire me?

During my time as a Pitch Wars mentor, I read hundreds upon hundreds of query letters and helped my mentees to craft and polish their own pitches and queries, successfully catching the eye of multiple top SFF agents. I know what makes a query stand out from the pile, and I can point out areas that might cause agents to hesitate. I have also completed training on how to edit query letters with the Editorial Freelancers Association.

Take a look at a sample query critique (link opens in a new tab) I did for the Pitch Wars blog.

Ready to book?

After making a secure payment through Stripe, you'll be redirected to a booking form where you can upload your query letter and tell me about any accessibility requirements.

I normally provide feedback in a .docx file, via comments and Tracked Changes—please let me know if you need it provided in an alternative way.

I will usually get my feedback back to you within 3–4 business days, but I'll contact you to let you know if the waiting time is currently longer.

£70 for feedback on your query letter (up to 350 words / one page max.)

Book a query letter critique

Blurb critique

A clear and compelling blurb is essential if you want to get your target readers excited about your novel. I'll give you feedback on your blurb so that you can make sure it sets up the right expectations and really packs a punch.

£65 for feedback on your blurb (up to 250 words)

Book a blurb critique

Short pitch critique

Whether you’re taking part in a social media pitching event, looking for beta readers online, or marketing your already-published book to your followers, I'll give you feedback on your short pitches to make sure that they irresistibly hook people in.

£60 for feedback on up to three related pitches (up to 200 words total)

Book a pitch critique

After making a secure payment through Stripe, you'll be redirected to a booking form where you can upload your materials and tell me about any accessibility requirements.